Writing Homework - 15/06

My Writing 

I'm planning to visit Machu Picchu next month with my parents because it's a astonishing and remarkable place in the world. Moreover my family have expected to visit it since three years ago. I want travel by plane because it only takes 1 hour to land. By that time the prices will be low-cost, reliable and affordable. We have a cheap place to host, therefore we won't spend a lot of money. we want to visit many outstanding places like sacred valley, make a city tour in cusco and practice many sports such as paragliding, canopy, parachuting or jogging that's why we are planning to come back on August 1st. 

MY HOMEWORK TEACHER

Homework 1

 

I CORRECTED MY PARAGRAPH